I thought you were doing well in avoiding the pretentious until the last
sentence.
Chuck Norcutt
NSURIT@xxxxxxx wrote:
> I would go with Bill's statement of making it short and to the point. There
> are two things I like to see: 1) Something which is a bit of "reporting" of
> the facts. 2) Something that lets me know who is this person. So totally
> off
> the cuff when I need to be doing something else, for me an abbreviated
> version might look like this . . .
>
> Mr. Smith, a classically trained piccoloist, has had a lifelong interest in
> photography. He works in a variety of formats with both film and digital
> capture. In addition to his position with the Bodacious Philharmonic
> Orchestra,
> he serves as an adjunct professor of photography at Lower Mississippi
> Institute of Technology. In this body of work, he examines the relationship
> of
> the tides to the Universe . . .
>
> Bill Barber
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